Black Ghost

Stupidity all around us. :roll:

Not bad, just take off the exclamation marks in the las two sentences. It makes the end have less effect.

Mii Love Wii. :D

I like this a lot, actually. I thought it was very interesting, right from the first sentence, and it keeps the reader hooked throughout. You don't waste your time with ...

Yes, LamaLama, I'm sure you could do much better.

Hi, Saga! Have fun at YWS and PM me if you have any stories that need to be read or anything magic related. :D -Tony

HI PEOPLES! It's time for "Stuff You Should Know" the sequel! And sequels are good because sequels are more, and more is good, and good is nice, and nice is ...

This isn't the end, and anyone who wants to know more about the character Max should read the previous chapters. (they are on the site)

Krystlstars, I'm not sure this forum is the right place to put this.....

I thought is was a very meaningful poem. I can definetly feel what your trying to say. Nice poem!

Max was floating. He didn’t know where he was, or why he was there, or when he got there. All he knew was the warm sensation pulsing through his body. ...

Love is everything that's good about the world.

Thanks, Snoink, this is very useful stuff. It made me realize how synonyms for said can make or break dialogue.

I don't know much about critting poetry, but I just wanted to say I liked this, especially the last stanza.

Hi there! Feel free to PM me about any stories or poems you have, and I'll be happy to read them. Welcome to YWS! -Tony